Loretta wears an Angela Davis sphere
picked to perfection atop a broad skull,
colored insolence-orange to compliment
her red-bone tone and the white boys love it-
or so they say when they say something at all
to a picayune yeller waiting table for tips;
she saves three months strong to buy
suede kitten heels and a rayon fluted skirt-
fine as anything the white gals sport
down at the legionnaire's hall on Saturday nights,
kicking ankles and hems to black-balled beats;
but she can't go where she can't go so
she dances to echos in the outside lot
while old men pass bottles on benches nailed to brick-
they blink like Lazarus as she bumps and grinds,
their laughter cracks across the gravel
like cartridges jacked into waiting breeches,
cold as a cocking trigger.
7 comments:
This one is awesome. I love how you placed all the colors right beside each other in the first stanza. The language has great sound. It really goes to show how you put a lot more care into choosing your words than a lot of writers.
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ah / you still have it :)
so here i am / try ing to figure out
who is letter shaper / lol
should have known it was you
it was your shoe fetish that gave you
a way / lol
hope you are well / & not getting in to too much trouble
~finchyx
Wonderful. I could see her dancing in that lot.
Also love the effects on your pic!
I loved this piece.
love the power of this
especially the sound and imagery of the last three lines
So strong; every line a chapter to the story.
The final stanza is amazing.
hey! Well Im glad u liked my site. Not sure how lng ago u posted tht comment...
Love the pix on ur blog. I will confess tht poetry sometimes makes little sense to me.
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